A Subject Line that Stinks More Than Blue Cheese 😷
The email from Rocky screamed at me from my spam folder…
…with a subject line so stinky I had to share it with you:
“Re: #Give me Appointment Please…!!”
I opened the email (only because I thought I’d write an email about it)…
…and found a pitch for credit card processing services.
My reaction: No way, José! (#FatChance) 
SO many things wrong with this subject line. I’ll focus on one:
It smacks of desperation.
Please is a nice word. A useful word (often).
But in this case — preceded by “Give me” and followed by (not one, but two) exclamation points…
…”please” is not pleasing. “Please” is PLEADING, and…
…Pleading kills the sale.
A few months ago, Dean Isaacs and I ran a 5in25 training called “5 Tips to Write Irresistible Subject Lines and Headlines So Prospects Tune In and Read On.”
Five tips in 25 minutes that Dean and I presented live.
I’ve never shared the replay…
…until now.
You can have it. All you have to do is ask (nicely 
).
Reply to this email with “#SubjectLineTips-Please” and I’ll send you the link to the replay video.
Don't go away yet..
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